this is just the rough short story i’ve just written..give me your opinion about the plot..mind the grammar mistakes..i’ll edit that later..can’t wait to read your opinions!
here’s the story (it’s just a fiction,ok.not a real life story)
Kim just got back from her workplace. she was so
tired that she can even sleep standing up.
“huhhh..what a hectic week for me..”
she had this big research project she have to handle causing
her to stay up 24/7 for months now.luckily,the project
finished successfully today.And she desperately asked for a
holiday.She said she wanted to travel around the
world..hehe..Actually,she’s not.Traveling around the world
means staying at home in her dictionaries.Looks like she’s
still like her teenage days.Naughty and always good in
finding excuses and multiply reasons.She haven’t changed a
bit.Well,except for herself.She’s 27 years old now.Still
single.Childish for her age.She’s not chubby anymore instead
growing up to be a stunningly beautiful woman.Yet,she still
haven’t got any boyfriend mainly because she refuses to go out with them.She’ll create various reasons for not going on the blind dates her friends set up.Or,she’d just play with them.
Deep down,she still haven’t recovered from her past
relationship.or so-called relationship.Apparently,she never
intended to forget her first love.
But now she’s concentrating on her career as a researcher
and barely even got time for herself until she get her sabbatical
holiday approved.She never been this happy
before.Well,except when she’s seventeen.
on her first day of the holiday,she just spend the
time at home looking at a giant pile of mess made by her
all this time.She really need a maid.
after a week at home,she starts going out.First,she went to
the mall to shop some stuffs she’d been longing before.You
can say that she’s quite a shopaholic.
All her friends including her 2 best friends were
overseas.It’s been a long time since they hang out together
and talk about their lives.And she isn’t quite making
friends at her work place considering all her colleagues are
nerds.As she thought.So,she’ll go out on her own.She’s
really a loner,isn’t it?Living in her own world and all.
On the way back home,she rides the train to save
money.ha!!Who knows the train would be so crowded.It’s not
even in weekend!she thought.It’s been a long time since her last train ride to home.She usually go home with her convertible.
after a few stations,she managed to get a sit nearby the
door.Without her realize,she’s asleep along with dozens of
shopping bags.She didn’t realize the train was
already making a turn back to the main station by the time
she woke up.She still has a long way back home.
Listening to her i pod,she looked at the surrounding.It’s not
that crowded now since all the passengers were in their seat
and most of them were sleeping anyway.Then,she saw a young
couple.Maybe they’re in 16 or 17 since they’re still wearing
the school uniforms and they were holding hands??
“huhh..whatever you kids”she mumbled on her own.Then,the
train stopped at the same station she went earlier.If only
she’s not asleep after that,then, she wouldn’t have to be in
this train any longer..
As usual,the door opened and people were rushing by to get a
sit but all the seats were taken by the previous
passenger.She saw this old woman..maybe in her 70s
struggling on her way in..Are this people even notice her?
Without any further ado,she gave the woman her sit.She’s not
being nice but afraid the woman will stumble on her feet if
the train speeds.
So,now she’s back on standing.It’s quite a job to hold on
when you’re holding a giant shopping bags while trying to
get your i pod to switch it off.Suddenly,her i pod dropped
while she’s trying to get it in her jeans pocket.
Luckily,there’s a hand grabbing the i pod and hand it to her.
“There you go miss..”the man gave her a look and smile.
As usual,she didn’t even look at his face and just picked
the i pod quickly.She didn’t want to mess up with this guy and immediately looked away.
“Kimberly Annabella Stewart..”she heard someone called her name.
People never call her by that name.All her friends called
her Kim,,her nickname when she’s a teenager and also her
cyber name.Maybe she’s just hallucinating,considering she’s
really thirsty now and lack of water really can make you feel..
“Kimberly Annabella Stewart!”
She spun around to look at the previous guy who gave her
the i pod.How did he know her name anyway.Does it on her i pod or something.
It takes a while for her to digest the information and look
carefully at the person before her stomach gave a full blast
of roller coaster ride.
It’s him.
“Could that guy be him?”she gave herself a monologue.
The guy must have been aware by her confused and pale look
and approached her.
“Kim..”he called again.
that was the name her friends called her.only it’s not
colleague friends.It’s just the friend from the past..
She now realized he was Gerry before everything went black-
**************************************…
She woke up with a heavy feeling on her head.Her throat feels dry and she need a mirror.
“Ouchhh..what the hell had happened?”she mumbled again with
her hand on her head.
It was like a flash of light the nurse came.She have the
sweet face and didn’t look fierce as she assumed.
“So,how do you feel today miss?”
“Yeah yeah…i feel fine..sort of.Eh,what day is today?What
time?Since when I’m here?”she asked the nurse impatiently.
“It’s been 2 days now.I heard you passed out in the train on
the way back home for dehydration.Your friend came yesterday
and stayed with you until this morning before he had to go
for some urgent call”.the nurse carefully replied.
“Okay..hold on!did you just say he??”She’s surprised and
tried to recall back what happened on that day.
Then,the nurse almost dropped her tray when she almost
jumped off the bed.
“what??!hey nurse,what’s his name?i mean,the friend of mine
who..who..”
Her voice trailed off when she finally remembered the voice
calling her on that day.The voice she’d been longing to hear
for a long time.How could she didn’t recognize that face
earlier?It could have been easier to run away and not
meeting him in this most embarrassed way in the whole
world.She can’t believe that she just passed out in front of
that guy!
“..miss…miss..do you hear me?his name is Gerry if I’m not
mistaken”
Now,she felt like fainting again..She need to get out from
here ASAP before he came back.
She asked again the poor nurse when she would be released
and glad to hear that she’ll be released this evening of the
test gave no problem.
Then,she went to the bathroom to look at the mirror.She
looked unhealthy.Pale.Her face is skinny and the bone jaw is
almost visible.Maybe that’s why he can’t recognize her
earlier because she looked totally different from the 17
year old Kim.As far as she remember,she looked chubby and
well,fat.Now,she barely even seen a single fat in her body.
Her ribs are clearly visible and her but didn’t even show
up.And she’s not wearing that glasses anymore thanks to the
laser surgery a few years ago.What a transformation she’d
been through.And of course,they haven’t met in years after
the tragic accident happened.It’s not that tragic
anyway..but tragic enough for her to change everything and
recovering from the trauma is way more harder than anyone
could think.
She finally washed her face and her hands before looking for
a clean towel and rub her hand and face.
Looks like the game is not over yet because when she exit
from the toilet,she found out that the guy she’d been
thinking was standing in front of the door,holding a bouquet
of fresh flowers.
She realized that her mouth was hanging open before she
closed them back..hehe
“I’m sorry for not recognizing you at the first place”
he started the conversation after a long silence.It’s like
the time has stopped or something.She barely can’t hear a
pin drop.
“Yeah..me too”she croaked.
“I mean,look at you.You’ve changed a lot Kim…A lot”
“Well,i almost couldn’t recognize you either.You seemed grown
up”.Finally she find the right word to say.
She didn’t want him to know that she’d been suffering all
this time for him.Just to forget him and he came back now??
“I think you better sit down first. You looked like you’re
about to pass out again.Luckily,I can catch you up the last
time coz you’re so light.”He tried to make a joke.As usual,she
didn’t laugh or smile.
What??he catch me the last time.That must be embarrassing.
He must have look at her burning cheek when tried to change
the conversation.He told her about the meeting on the train
and her still ignoring people and all.He asked her again what
she was doing now..
She must have been fallen asleep again when he talked to her
that afternoon coz he left her a note beside the bed.
“Never change huh cutie?Still sleeping like a baby even
though you’re obviously 27 now..hehe..will call you later.I
already take your phone number inside your bag..and by the
way..I LOVE YOU”
Gerry
What????????!!!!!!!!After all this time he’s still
saying
that to her?Didn’t he remember what happened 10 years
ago??Didn’t he remembered how he left her there after she
finally able to express all my feelings toward him?Did he
ever remember that?After all the humiliation and
mortification she have to face with all their friends.All of
them?Did he ever felt that?In front of Pam and Alice?Can he
imagined what people said about her when she finished my
sentence?Can he imagine what she’d been called?And did he
know that sheI have to start my life all over again before she
could actually got a job?Did he knew that?All he knows is
saying that stupid things all over again.She can’t take it
anymore!
3 days later,Kim went home knowing her nightmares are
going to be back again.After all those years she realized
that still haven’t get over him yet.But what can she do
about that now?
She already know the answer 10 years ago..She get it already
but then,when he came back like this..things are getting
like the old time again.Suddenly,all the memories came back
like a film negatives.Some of them are very clear and some
of them still blurred in her mind.That night,she went asleep
clutching the old diaries where all the feelings came back
live in her mind once again..
The next day,she woke up hearing the alarm clock..maybe from
the neighbors.It takes a while before she figured out that
it was actually her phone ringing.She was too sleepy to read
the caller id and just picked up the phone instead.Who could
have wake her at 8 am in the morning on her holiday??
“hullo..”she mumbled,as usual
“hello,can I speak to Kim please..”
Suddenly,she’s startled to hear that familiar voice.It was
him!So,it’s true about him taking her phone number huh?
He started the one hour conversation and finally asked Kim
out.To catch up each others’ life,as he said.
She had no choice but to accept the offer thinking that he
might call again and again.And she didn’t want that to
happen..hohhhh..
Later that night,she found herself digging the closet
finding suitable clothing for that stupid dinner.After 15
minutes of hard work,she found herself her favorite shirt
and khaki pants(it’s uncomfortable to wear jeans in front of
him).It’s like going on a first date or something.But
still.It’s not a date..
When she arrived at the fancy restaurant(didn’t know that
this guy even had a taste like this),he’s already waiting
for her patiently at the table nearby the large window.Nice
view!I didn’t know what did he see in me.Well,she knows she’s not
wearing an appropriate dress and all.Wearing sneakers never
harm anyone,right?
She heard her stomach make a grumbling noise and realized she
haven’t eat anything today yet.No wonder she’s so skinny.Now,she
really misses her old body back.The 17 years old Kim seems
happy..not like her now.She looked like people with anorexia
or something.
“Can we take orders now?”he asked her politely.
Since when this guy was being polite with her?As far as she
remembered,he never talk nicely to her.In fact,they’re
always teasing each other..10 years back that
is.Now,everything seems different.
“So,what have you become Ger?”She used to called him Ger.
Now,it seems awkward calling him by that name.This is
because he wasn’t the old Gerry anymore.In fact,he looked
hot.She immediately cut the thought out of her mind.
“I’m a 3D animator”.he replied with a slight smile on his
face.That’s cute!
“Owhhhh…seems like you have what you’ve been dreaming of
right?Being a 3D animator and all”
“Yeahh..you’re right.except for one thing”.his face look
solemn all of the sudden.His expression,is however,can’t be
read.Is this Gerry that she’d known before?10 years
ago,he’ll tell her everything,,almost anything.
“What’s that thing?”
“Being with someone whom I love”
*cough*
that made she choked on her salad.what???! and she thought he’s already married.What happened to her fiancee he always mentioning?
“eh,i thought you’re married with Jennifer..what happened?”
his expressionless face suddenly turned out to be moody all
of the sudden and she knew she had said the wrong
word..oooopsss..
“I’m sorry to ask you that.You don’t need to answer
that”.She said reluctantly.
“ermmm..never mind.We’re going to tell everything happened
in our lives anyway..Let me start”
You can tell that she just lose her appetite to eat that
delicious meal to hear what he’s saying.She’s always been like that.
“Actually,I didn’t get married with her.”she tried not to
show her shocked face as he spoke.
“We’re getting so closed on that day before I realized one
thing.I didn’t love her.I thought I could love her
after..after I made the decision about you..I really thought
I can do that”.he started to get emotional.
Kim,on the other hand,stood there like a statue listening
to the confession.Tears are just starting to flow..
“I really forced myself at that time.I concentrate on my
studies and tried to forget you.Every time there’s a message
arrived,I thought it was you and it’s actually not.And I
realized that you’re not coming back.I tried to contact your
cell phone,but you already changed the number and even your
best friends didn’t know your current number.Then,everything
starts to crumble in front of me.I started to isolate myself
from the crowd and starts living in my own world.I was being
you,munie!I remembered to tease you about being inside the
snow globe and I’m staying in that kind of world now.I don’t
even know myself anymore.I can’t even find you during all
the KEX gatherings.It’s like you’re disappearing or
something.I have asked so many people,but they themselves
didn’t know where are you.It seems like you’re dead to me.I
started to realized that I had lose the girl I love the most
just because I can’t love her because of the stupid family
arrangement.Just because she finally summoned her courage to
tell me that she really loves me.I left her at that
point.The point which can make a whole lot of differences if
I didn’t done that.I shouldn’t have left that
girl.Suddenly,all the memories came by like a flood.Memories
about her that haunts me until today.And when I met her
now,she had changed dramatically,because of my fault.I am so
sorry Kim..I didn’t mean to hurt you so much.It’s just
that I’m so stupid and immature and dumb to realized the
consequences after that.But I just want you to know that I
still love you and in fact the love is growing for the past
10 years.I’m not sure what makes me found you in the
train.but I think we’re destined for each other…. ”
“okay..that’s enough!!”Kim snapped harshly.
She didn’t know how much tears have been produced but she
just can’t take it anymore.How could he have done that to
her so much?Maybe the fact that he’s still love her is
true.but that doesn’t mean he can get away that
easily.There’s just no way!
“I think I better get going..”her voice trembling as she
made her way out of the restaurant.She just couldn’t take
that explanation anymore.She couldn’t digest any of this.It’s the best for them not to see each other anymore.
She tried to walk away as fast as she could to her car
across the road.She didn’t care when he tried calling her
name and shouting something she couldn’t heard.Then,she saw
the bright light coming from the side of the road.Maybe it’s
a spotlight.Or is it a car?
Then,everything when blurred.After she saw the bright
light,she heard a loud bang from the nowhere.She couldn’t
think of anything else.What is up with that loud noise
anyway?She heard a weird sound rushing towards her.Among the
noises,she barely hear the sound of someone calling her name…
**************************************…
When Gerry finished saying his words,Kim just got out from
the restaurant hurriedly.He called her name several times
but she just didn’t hear that.In fact,she’s on her way back
to her car.He must catch her.or else,he might not see that
woman again for the rest of his life.
But then,he saw a lorry coming across the road and it was
way fast.There’s a fat chance the lorry can’t see the skinny
Kim in the dark.Plus,she’s wearing a black shirt.
Everything went so fast when he tried to called her back.The
collision just happened in front of his very eyes!!
He doesn’t know what to do but to just ran towards her and
grab her tightly..
“Oh my god..wake up!!”
“Kim!!wake up!you have to wake up!I’m not finished yet..”
he can feel the tears running like a Niagara fall but he
didn’t care.All that matters now is her safety and that
didn’t look good.
“please wake up!i need you!i have been waiting the moment to
meet you back so,wake up!Therese lots more to talk about!!”
He saw her hand is still moving but she’s definitely badly
injured.The blood is everywhere!And where is the ambulance??
He saw her eyes opened a little and he thinks she’s trying
to say something.Oh god.Don’t let her die.He couldn’t cope that.He already loses her once.
“there’s something you need to know”.her voice croaked.
“Kim..please stay with me.Don’t die yet!”he’s pleading like
a child wanting a lollipop.
“do you know that…..i…really…really love you?”it seems
hard for her saying that words for the second time.
but this is not a perfect timing really.
“i know..i know..from the beginning.but please stay with
me..please..”
“I’m tired Ger..I’m really tired of all these”.
“no you can’t give up now!”
he can feel a crowd of people surrounding them hearing him
shouting like a maniac.
“can someone please call an ambulance!!???”
“i love you..”
that’s all he heard before she closed her eyes back..
**************************************…
3 years later…
It was not a perfect morning for Gerry because as he wake
up,the sound of the noise from the neighbor crashes his
Sunday morning.
he’s been busy for the days of the week.So,he couldn’t be
disturbed on the weekend..
“what a morning..”
he immediately wake up and take a warm shower before heading
downtown for breakfast.A usual weekend routine he had for
years now.
The weather seems nice and sunny today.
“Perfect for a vacation!”he thought.
after the breakfast,he went to the usual place he would
hangout on the weekend,hospital.Maybe it sounds weird for
normal people.But for him,it’s like a home sweet home.
After saying hi to the nurses working in the morning
shift,he went straight to the room.
It was huge.Like a master bedroom in a house complete with a
large plasma TV,furniture,toilet and bathroom and also a
small kitchen.It was like a small apartment.But,it’s a
hospital in reality.He tiptoed and enter the room just like
not to disturb the people who’s sleeping in there.
At the huge rack,Therese lots of book collection from
childhood until adulthood.all the CDs and DVDs were kept
neatly below them.it was just like a small house.
“Hey,I brought you some more books..but I’m not going to
read this today because I’m too tired and I need a good
sleep..Mind if I join you?”
Whoever passing the room must have thought he was talking to
himself.Well,he’s not.In fact,he was talking to his beloved
wife.
He then put the book aside and take a nap beside the person sleeping
on the bed.No signs of her waking up to reply to him.But,she can definitely heard him clearly.
The accident 3 years ago made Kim in comatose condition.He
still remember when the doctor said she’d never wake up
maybe for the rest of her life.But he would never give
up.The doctor said if their family support the patient
mentally and physically,the chances of her waking up maybe a
little bit higher.a little.but,he never gave up.He spent
almost his time watching over her and eventually starts
talking and reading books and articles for her.He knew she’d
listen because the doctor said so.
He began to tell her every single detail what happened in
his life..just like he intended to..and he also started to
decorate the room just like a home to make sure she’s
comfortable.This act has inspire many people from that
hospital.Even the doctor was impressed with the
couple.They’re so strong.If only that accident didn’t occur
than they would live happily ever after.but,it’s been 3
years now and still no change from her.she’s still looks
like that.that cute face almost haven’t change for 3
years.and yet she’s still sleeping like a sleeping beauty waiting for her prince charming to come and kiss her.But,it’s just a fairy tale.
Even though she might not waking up forever,the most
important thing is he already know the answer.they both know
it perfectly well and all the questions are now pretty
well-answered coz it only narrows to one thing,they love
each other…